Tuesday, January 20, 2015

Repetition



my daughter, my daughter
oh what have you done
to your long hair

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my son, oh my son
why have you grown
- so quiet




silently snow falls
covering the village path
- silence falls

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noisy jenny wren
chirping at day break
noisy, so noisy


little jenny wren
sings early in the morning
oh so, so early




oh spring, oh spring
how I long for you 
- oh spring





10 comments:

  1. A great series --- longing for spring too --- an ache in the first two.
    And I love your quilted Jenny Wren! :)

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    1. Thanks! The wren is from my 60 day bird challenge last year. I auctioned some of them, including this one for relay for life.

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  2. The question to the son caught me by surprise. Great write!

    Sunrise to Sunrise

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    1. thanks - i like that one because of all the possibilities for answers from death to maybe a little one sneaking candy, or a teen mad at the world........

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  3. The one about the daughter sounds like a country song.. so many great repetitions here.

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    1. Thanks. In reality it should say...
      oh daughter, oh daughter
      please brush your long hair
      oh please, please, please

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  4. A great series ... the first two poems reminded me also of a folk song I once heard.

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    1. Thanks! -I'd like to hear the folk song.

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