Thursday, December 4, 2014

Troiku - Peace

Carpe Diem # 618 Peace

Trying a new form of haiku , Troiku by Kristjaan Panneman.  Learn more about it here: Troiku


peace flowing 
in a river of blood
fallen soldiers


                                               peace flowing
                                               old wounds heal
                                               balance restored


                                               in a river of blood
                                               all are washed clean
                                               redemption


                                              fallen soldiers
                                              make peace with their gods
                                              new flowers blossom

15 comments:

  1. Oh, brilliant! You've done this marvelously!
    The troiku can be tough but you've made it look effortless.
    Hoping for peace at last ---

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    1. Thanks - it came easy as I was trying to make the first more uplifting.

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  2. I wonder if fallen soldiers ever really do make peace with their gods. It's something I have a hard time imagining. I think my last thoughts as a fallen soldier would be: "What a waste!" But, really, what do I know?

    Shattering Their Peace

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  3. Wow Dolores ... what a gorgeous Troiku you have turned your haiku into. You even have stayed at the theme of your haiku. Really well done ... I hope that this new form will be done by other Carpe Diem Haiku Kai family-members.

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    1. Thank you! I am looking forward to writing more of these. :0)

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  4. Wow Dolores.....a superb job at this very haunting topic.

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  5. Good.. this removed quite a lot of dread from the first haiku

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  6. wonderfully completed with the troiku! Bravo!

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  7. Would that our rivers of ink could heal the rivers of blood. You have done a marvelous job of evoking the mysterious tragedy of war, yin and tang flowing though the troiku. Thank you.

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    1. I agree the pen should be mightier than the sword.

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  8. wow these are great! independent yet all tell the same story.

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