Monday, December 22, 2014

Shooting Star

Carpe Diem Seven Days to Christmas # 4  Shooting Star



under sleeping bag
huddled on sidewalk
Geminid Shower


brilliant streak
momentary glory
igniting our hope


sizzling flash
lights the night
carrying my wish

6 comments:

  1. Nice collection. The idea of homelessness particularly in the cold weather is just so awful. Every one deserves a roof over their head.I like the shooting star ones the one best.

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    1. Hadn't thought of the homeless. I was just recollecting a night we woke the children and watched a December meteor shower.. Yes everyone deserves a roof.

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  2. Builds up to the great grand finale. Interesting fist haiku....there's a lot one can say about that one...

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  3. What a wonderful series -- I can imagine that glimmer of hope in the homeless family -- the wishes rising into the sky to greet the shooting star -- Very nicely done. :)

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    1. Until the comments, I just thought of them as individual haiku. Now when I read over I am greeted with a series that was a happy accident.

      May be the last lines should read:
      sizzling flash
      lights the night
      carrying wishes

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