Sunday, October 19, 2014

Tan Renge - River Stone prompt

River Stone prompt from Carpe Diem 
The first poem is our host's response

river stones
caressed by flowing water
                                                                    pale moon shines                                        (Becca Givens)
                                                    
The sound of a waterfall
                                                         Makes the night more silent                            (Chèvrefeuille)


I had many ideas on this one. I think I like the 5th one best.
Here are my attempts:


river stones
caressed by flowing water
                                                                    pale moon shines                                        (Becca Givens)
               
water slips between fingers
tree shadow, not large catfish



river stones
caressed by flowing water
                                                                    pale moon shines                                        (Becca Givens)
               
feet slip on mosey bottom
your memory toppled as well



river stones
caressed by flowing water
                                                                    pale moon shines                                        (Becca Givens)

autumn leaf navigating
rushed on to new adventure



river stones
caressed by flowing water
                                                                    pale moon shines                                        (Becca Givens)
               
tumultuous evening
solace found at river bank



river stones
caressed by flowing water
                                                                    pale moon shines                                        (Becca Givens)        

endless chant of whippoorwill 
increases my loneliness.

8 comments:

  1. Oh, very nice! I too like the fifth -- but I also like your third. Equating slipping on the mossy bottom with the toppling of memories is brilliance.

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    1. wasn't sure #3 worked, so glad you liked it.

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  2. Oh shoot they are all great but that 5th one is absolutely stunning!!...I love the sound of whippoorwill rolling off my tongue

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  3. Nice page, and beautiful finishes

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  4. Only those who know the mournful call of the whippoorwill can truly appreciate what you have written. Thank you!

    River Stones

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